Writing
good web content is a lot like planning a big dinner party. You’re looking
forward to having lots of guests, but you’re not sure about when they’ll
arrive or how hungry they’ll be. You know Deborah will only nibble on the
salad, Laura will snack on the chicken, and Dan will cheerfully devour
everything you serve. As an experienced party planner, you’ll accommodate
your guests’ diverse appetites. A good web writer does the same thing –
accommodates the appetites of all content-hungry visitors by providing
different amounts of content for different users.
Web readers are known to be both hungry and impatient. To satisfy their
need to find what they’re looking for, you have to write concisely. But if
you only give web readers factoids, you won’t answer their questions about
your organization or topic. Happily, as a web writer, you have the
flexibility to provide content in a variety of sizes and to let visitors
choose the amount of information that will satisfy them. In our Writing for
the Web classes, we call this writing concept the bite, the snack, and the
meal.
The CEO’s
Speech: Three Ways
Let us show you how to provide a bite, a snack, and a meal with a
real-life example. You’ve been asked (told) to put your CEO’s keynote
speech up on the web. The edict from on high is “Don’t change a word!”
The lengthy speech details the research your company, PetersMed, has done on
the effectiveness of the new chicken pox vaccine. The CEO, Sam Peters,
concludes by proposing national legislation requiring the vaccine. You know
that some web readers will want to read the entire speech, the meal, and
perhaps even print it out.
But you know that other visitors don’t have the appetite for the entire
speech. Some visitors are satisfied with knowing what it’s about, the
bite, and others are satisfied with a concise summary of the speech, the
snack.
The Bite: A
Headline with a Message
“So what did Peters say?” Some site readers only want the bottom line
and they want it short. They’re satisfied with just a bite, but they
prefer something hardy to “lite.” On the web, the bite is a headline.
You might be tempted to cheat and use the original speech title for your
bite. But the title for CEO Peters’ speech was PetersMed’s Research on
Chicken Pox Vaccine. The original title isn’t enough to satisfy. You want
your readers to get the entire message of the speech from the bite. A
satisfying bite would be this powerful message headline: CEO Peters Says
Research Supports Mandatory Chicken Pox Vaccination. And you can make the
bite work even harder for you by making it the link to the full text.
The Snack: A
Concise Summary
What about those who are moderately hungry? They want a snack , a good
summary, 2 or 3 sentences long. The easy way to write the snack would be to
lob off the first paragraph of the speech and call it a snack. But in this
case, you’d just get the CEO’s opening joke. And in most instances,
using the first paragraph of a print document doesn’t make for a
satisfying snack. Many articles begin with an anecdote or a provocative hook
not a summary.
Here’s a satisfying snack that summarizes the CEO’s speech:
“PetersMed’s four-year study of the chicken pox vaccine shows that it
reduces cases of the childhood illness by 80 percent. CEO Sam Peters
supports national legislation, and efforts by the American Academy of
Pediatrics, to make the vaccine mandatory for school-age children.”
Presenting the
Bite, Snack, and Meal
How will you present these three versions of the same content at your
site? Try using the bite as the headline for the snack, the summary. Link
the bite to the meal, the entire document, by making the headline hot. For
an example, take a look at the website for HandsNet, Inc., an organization
that supports online collaboration in the human services community. Read the
snack under each hypertext headline (the bite) or click the headline to take
you to the meal.
Or you could choose to present the three versions all on one page: a
headline, a summary beneath the headline or as a sidebar, and the full
version. For an example of this kind of web writing, go to www.abc.com and
click on the Technology section. You’ll find technology news: a series of
headlines followed by article summaries. But click on any article headline
and you’ll go to a page that offers all three content amounts – the
headline, the summary, and the full article.
Spicing Up the
Meal: Add Hot Links
You can add spice to the meal, without changing a word, by adding
hypertext links. What else might the reader of the speech want to know? More
about the CEO? Link to his bio. Background on the company? Link to your
site’s About Us page. Results from PetersMed’s research on chickenpox?
Provide a link to your report. Additional questions? Link to a knowledgeable
company contact.
The Taste Test:
Less is More
Ironically, the test of good web writing might be that your visitor
doesn’t have to read all you’ve written to get your point. If your bite
and snack are effective, your reader can choose not to read your meal. In
web writing, the highest praise might be: “I didn’t read the whole
thing.”
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About the Authors:
Leslie O'Flahavan and Marilynne
Rudick are partners in E-WRITE. E-WRITE teaches the new rules
for writing well in the electronic age